really liking the story so far! I like how it's so diferent from all the other stories out there, or at least from the ones I've read on fiction press. Update soon! )

Very nice, I like the title of it too xx

This is a very interesting story. I like the "world" and environment that you've set up. It's Earth, but kind of like a different version of it that had a different future. Something people can relate to but it has a twist. The characters are pretty interesting too, I like the girl. Carston..that's a funny name. Anyways, looking forward to the next one. You're a good writer, I'm kind of jealous, haha.

June seems so AWESOME right now! *laughs* I love how you're able to express emotion without really having your characters say much at all. Carston thinks a lot...just as suggestion, you think you might want to try separating her thoughts from other stuff? Like with italics or something? I dunno, just a suggestion. Anywayz, good work, keep it up, and update!

This is really good so far! Unfortunately the world's state sounds just like our's at this time. Anywayz, the onyl things I noticed were like 2 minor spelling mistakes and the end of this chapter was a little confusing.

It sounded like the Vampire had come into the house even though he wasn't invited in...that may just be my mind working too hard for the summer though! Good work, keep it up, and UPDATE!

This is cool, it had a good pase and lots of stuf happening. Update soon :)