"So we prop them open with toothpicks." Oh my. This line is devilishly brilliant. The imagery here is both startling and creative.

"Hurdy gurdy man." Obviously, I now have that Donovan song stuck in my head. :P

"Tomorrow morning sneaks in quietly." I absolutely love the subtle hint of voyeurism here. What a perfect way to end the piece. :)

Absolutely loved this. Not only was the imagery almost painfully clear, the writing itself was pure genius. Nicely done.

A lot of your recent poetry has flushed sexuality with the page. Very nice work of late.

Juliet.

Wow.
I really like your use of metaphors and similes. Nice job.