This story is getting better! I like how you write the relationship between the three, and how you explain Marie's position in the relationship.

Only thing I miss is a little more insight in the characters' lives. Naturally, changing writing style into 1st person is too late, but it allowes for deeper insight into the characters for the reader.
Looking forward to read more!
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This is getting interesting. But I must say its going a little bit slow with each chapter. Indeed; you have a lot of dialogue, but not all of it is necessary. I noticed a few grammatical errors, but that's not the kind of writer I am to be picky on it.
All in all, I can see where its going, however slowly, but I like your idea for the story! Just don't use so much unnecessary details. Any questions, just PM me.
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This seems like it could be a good story! I like how you don't make too much a scene of what kind of family Marie probably has. Only thing about this is that just SUDENLY Paul showed up, like out of nowhere, without any greetings or any remark that they had sat at his table or anything. That made it a little confusing, but all in all, a great first chapter! The prologue was good too! I'm interested in seeing what it has got to do with the story!

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