"We stand tall in the silence of a tumbleweed morning." Oh my God. The imagery here is DIVINE! The 'tumbleweed morning' description is beyond amazing. This line is perfect in every way. :D :D :D

The focus in this is good. Setting driven pieces are hard to pull off but you did a fantastic job keeping focus on the town instead of the character(s). Especially - left us here to contemplate the emptiness- like their only spectators. Plus the personification of all the sights in the ghost town. Makes me all giddy hah, great job and thanks for the reviews.

'ghost wisp' and 'tumbleweed morning'
were fantastic.

nice job!

I absolutely loved the descriptions you had in this piece. As a reader, I could basically see everything that you was written. The imagery was so vivid and well written. Also, I loved this line:

"we stand
tall in the silence of a tumbleweed morning"

Besides the imagery, I found that the writing there was so powerful it could've stood alone. Excellent work.

- Dee, from the Review Marathon.
[Check it out sometime. Link's in my profile]

this is not too much like yours
usually are without intimate
macroscopic inspections of human
beings or their breeding habits
or teeth, but i like it quite a
lot anyway; it certainly portrays
a level of desolation i can't
recall in any other work of yours
that i've read.

Your descriptions I'm in love with. They were so creative and 'fresh'. "secondhand sand"- wonderful alliteration to start the poem! And "ghost wisp of a town" was nicely accurate; it conveyed the loneliness of the streets well, and how barren it is. "tumbleweed morning" was fantastic. Very creative. :D I like that description for saying the morning is fleeting, moving.

I only have one dislike in the entire poem. "houses fail to be homes with no families living there." I didn't think that line was very smooth. The wording is so different from the rest of the piece.

The ending was rather effective, I thought. :) I like how you included "it is quiet" to show the setting. It helped the 'mood'. "and we remember what once was" is just heartbreaking. It was a strong ending. Good job!

From the Review Marathon (link's in the profile!)
-Kate

I loved that first line: "secondhand sand on the streets" it flows so smoothly, and it's a nice set up for the mood of the rest of the piece.

This piece makes me think of a great storm, or a hurrican that passed through a city leaving it empty with the exception of a single few: "It is quiet, and we remember what once was" very strong ending, and you showed a lot of intimacy in it. Keep up the good work.

Much love,
Juliet.