 MartinIsMyGoldfish 2009-07-20 . chapter 1I like the premise and it's a great start! You might consider finding a way to begin the chapter that doesn't necessarily come right out and explain everything about their situation, but instead to demonstrate (using details or specific actions or a piece of dialogue) what it is you want to explain (i.e. that they are best friends, that she gets along better with guys than girls, etc., that it's senior year, etc.) I'm excited to read more! |