I adore your first two lines, and the last two lines: “I could have lost you in the masses
In the deep sea of tanned skin and empty sunscreen bottles SPF 3,32,86)” and “I put it on, ignoring the sweltering heat/And let the sun bake my skin underneath” - I love how you use heat as a pressure point between these two people. It’s almost like the heat is the only thing that physically separating them. And I liked how you paralleled and drew these two things together. They are completely related, and they open it cleverly, and close it with conciseness.

I also loved the verse about his fingers gracing the Goosebumps. With particularly emphasis on the word ‘grace’ it makes the touch seem so gentle and so veiled. It reminded me of courtship almost. Keep up the good work.

Much love,
Juliet.

Jules, via the Review Marathon (links in my profile)

I love how you portray being sweltering, yet a thought can make you "feel" cold enough to react to a touch with goose bumps. It's been ages since I've read your work, I'll be back :)

Jack

I loved how vivid the goose bumps/sweater imagery was - love is both 'cool' and 'hot' sometimes. :)

I really liked it. Short and sweet, very nice! :)