|Reviews for new clouds|
| S.Zix 7/23/09 . chapter 1
I really like this. How the girl keeps trying out new things until she ends up with a mess, and not just on the silly yellow dress. The imagery is just wonderful. Like the sky nesting in the hair.
My one suggestion is that the eyeshadow-lily image feels more like it fits in the third stanza. Since that one is more about nature, and the former has more images about synthetics. Otherwise everything fits and flows and nothing really jars me.
Thanks so much for the great work.