Ah, poetry. It's hard to really say something concretely constructive to your work, because honestly speaking I don't know the technicalities for writing poetry, but I think [from my limited knowledge] this is an amazing poem.

Keep it up.

- chocolate and bananas.

Wow

This poem is so chilling and gripping that I had to reread it to get a grip on how slippery and smooth the words fit toghether. The way you seperated the paragraphs and played with words "Be(lie)ving" "(In)(toxic)ation" "(Con)science gave your poem this spark that sets it apart.

Fluid. Your a poet. A damn good one. So good that this isn't just poetry it's art. Something so good that you taste it and see it and feel it and wish that you were there flowing through the tidal wave of perfect words.

Love the sad celestial imagery you wrote so well here. :)

"where dreams are made of black holes and chaos, not stardust" - so far from trivial it's brilliant. :)

"icarus-complexes" - i always love conotations in things, especially well crafted imagery. I admire your talent. :)

I could feel the narrator's obsession intensify with each word. The '(in)(toxic)ation' bit had me. If this poem says anything, it's that you're sheer genius with wordplay. The Icarus-complex is now my new favorite phrase/word. Thanks for posting this.

Wow, this is actually fantastic! :)

Perfect...

The imagery of this piece just beautiful! I particularly loved the 3rd and 4th stanzas. You're an incredibly talented writer :)

Wow. this is seriously one of the best poems i've ever read. I'm absolutely blown away by its depth and gripping qualities. excellent work!

Love this powerful piece.

This is amazing. Every time I read it.

Gripping. Chilling. Awakening. All at once.

It makes you think, and that in itself, makes it a success.

Till the next time,

Nyx Muses

...Wow. Just, wow. I can't get over how skilled you are. If I only had your talent, I'd become all angsty but beautiful in a Moleskine notebook or something! Please, write as much as you can. :D

Herro there. New reviewer here who happened to get here via your reviews on Narq's story. :) Okay, basically this poem seems pretty deep to me in terms of it's meaning. However I like the way you made this one out to be heavily linked to life in general. In fact I do think that this work could be fitted into the fantasy genre as well due to certain words being used here. Also I like the way you played around with the words usage. Really gave this work a deeper feel in this aspect. :)

P.S: If you're wanting to return this review, then return it via The Eternal Grail. :)

I love this. It's just so beautifully written, and the way you combine words is so... euphonious, I think, is the word. Lovely.