Great job. Its been a fun read so far. You are doing a nice job of developing the plot and characters. I look forward to the next chapter.

I like this story. Hope you update soon!

awesome start! good luck with finishing it

its great! this is an intro right? are you going to have more? and why is there two chapters of the same thing?

Awesome story so far, I have a story about dolls too, but mine is different than yours by a lot.

(shudders) Ohh...That was an excellent story...and quite scary, fiction or not...and I seriously hope it's fiction. I've got a bit of a similar fear of dolls, especially after reading a story, which is a bit similar to yours, about a soldier and his team, going on a mission, then got lost. They took refuge in a strange abandoned mansion they were SURE was not there before. Anyway, inside, all was pretty normal, except for one thing: There were dolls. Every room had closets FULL of porcelain dolls. The other soldiers started playing with the dolls, and by that, I mean destroying them, throwing them, you know. Anyway, the soldier here went to sleep. When he woke up, all his comrades were dead: stabbed, decapitated, strangled. Then, he saw LITTERS of dolls scattered EVERYWHERE, in the same positions as his comrades: stabbed, decapitated etc. He heard a noise, and turned around. He saw a doll. Walking towards him. With a knife. He screamed then ran way, and when he told his commander about it, he was fired due to his "craziness". He died, scared that the dolls would come back for him...Scary. Y'know...you could make a more detailed story like the one I told you about...;) Just an idea.

Hm. The writing is quite good. You have a realistic quality that is quite nice. The story is a bit overused, and there are a few typos, but it seems nice. Can't wait for the rest.

Interesting.