I'm finally reviewing again, egad I'm so slow :o

The lead-up to the kiss-that-never-was in this chapter and the previous one was good. I think some words could've been cut to keep the pace tighter, but the whole thing was still pretty focused (and suspenseful!)

"Shut up Adam." XD Love the ending, that's just perfect!

'Kay, I'm gonna review this third chapter, 'cause the nub I am has only read this far yet :P

I like this line: "Angel caught sight of Mason just beyond her brother, a pickle sticking out of his mouth, (had this been a normal time, she would have laughed and teased him to no end)"

It made me smile. It's not easy to successfully insert humour in a tense scene like that one, but you did just that. Good!

*bounds off to read the next chapter*

AWESOME chapter! I loved how this was such a fun chapter! I loved how laid back it was. This is the kind of chapter that makes you want to go down to the beach and read or write for a long while.
great job!
Anna
xoxox

Too corny? Ha! There's not such thing as too corny...well maybe. but not in this case. I think it was a great way to end this chapter! Awesome chapter!

DUDE! That was really good! I loved the characters interactions in this chapter - they were really great! I'm anxious to see what happens next!

URG!!
Such a bittersweet chapter - at least for me. While i'm so mad Adam interrupted their kiss, the brother and sister moment was really sweet!
I loved the end! "Shut up adam." Perfect!

AH
You just thought it would be a good place to stop?! Yeah, if you're trying to KILL me! Haha, i'm just kidding. Um...I might have said this before, but this is my new favorite chapter! :D I loved how sweet Mason was and this thoughts just before he leaned in. Ah! I loved it! Great job!

This chapter was really cute!
I like the little hints of Angel/Mason. They're so cute!

HeyHey :D

Awesome job! I rthought it was funny how she got allg iddy from Mason holding her hand xDD!
Keheheh, tis sweet :3
Keep them up O:
:D

~Love(Insert)-jo-boo-boo :P

I loved the Adam/Angel bonding. I thought it was really great! I love that Angel is so optimistic now, like how she wanted to go to the mall after everything that happen.
Great job!

Amazing! :) It's just as good as the other ones :D

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Who's happy? Anna's happy! Haha. What a great start to the story! I'm a little worried that Adam is going to take (not in a bad way) Angel away from Mason, which would make me kinda sad, but in a bittersweet way because i know going with Adam is probs the best living arrangement.
Great chapter!
~Anna

This story is so so so good! OH MY GOD ADAM! I can't wait to see his reaction to what their parents did to Angel. In a way it is his fault - not directly obviously. But since his disappearance (wanna know why THAT happened!) their parents took it out on Angel...ohh, guilt trip much? Haha.

I'm not gonna have internet for 15 days starting tomorrow night...so pretty please update it by tomorrow at noon-ish? PLEASE? I'd love you forever. :)

If not, I'll have something to look forward to when I'm back from my trip.

I like it OXOX