Great!

"You're the current I'm caught adrift in." I really like this line - it's very powerful and heartfelt. :)

I see where you are coming from with the dmaging side to this poem... but I also see a more pretty side to it... Well, guess 'hold me captive' doesnt exactly say 'love' but I can still see a prettier side :)

This is so so beautiful. I love the chilling tone throughout.
Great description and great emotion.
Overall, a really wonderful piece.


I would love opinions from a talented writer like yourself on my work. It would really mean a lot.

Wow...slightly chilling.. loved the image of the damaged ship. Great job :)

Great poem! I've still got stuff from my "relationships" that I need to get out. Writing is an excellent form of therapy. The entire poem relates to me, in a way. I just can't forget. I want to, but yet, it seems impossible...

Great poem! Keep up the great work!

"Your shadow dances." I love that imagery - especially since I often like to watch the shadows on my wall, of passing cars or tree branches, because it's so captivating.

"I close my eyes to keep you from sinking deep into me." Whoa. This line just hits the reader like a ton of bricks. It's so emotionally heavy. I love it.

"I drown in you." This is the best line. The tone is superb.

"I can't escape you." Wow. I really like this poem. The pain is so raw and real - great work hun. :)