NO NO NO NO NO NO! NO! just...NO! Dang it Kitty...NO! NOO!

Dang! Dang! Great chapter! Fantastic! Man I love this story...heck, you might even make me cry if Kitty dies. This is an awsome story. Keep updating.

this chapter is ok. i mean, the relationship is starting to get on my nerves a little. they are only twelve right? i like the attempt at the Jesus information, but i also think that it was a little rushed and sorta sudden. maybe you should gradually try to introduce the Biblical stuff :) update soon :)

omggmom! no way! HE SAID HE LOVED HER! thats awesome and she said it back. he doesnt mean just a friend love does he? no, of course not. because he loves her... AW!

THIS IS A AWESOME CHAPTER.

and oh no! jaycen (i never thought it could be spelled this way) died... no. now im sad... THANKS A LOT (jk)..

update son!
TAYLOR!

oh no! she has cancer! aw thats so sad! omigoodness i cant believe it! she better get better or i shall hunt you down and shank with a ninja! (jk, i dont have a ninja)

i officially hate Tyson... Nothing else is to be said on the subject...

update soon! and Kitty needs to get better!
TAYLOR!

haha i love this story!

iam very much confused on the whole Kitty getting sick thing. sometimes it seems like she is and then other times it seems like she isnt. plus you are dragging it out for a long time. is there a reason for that?

i also very much dislike Tyson. He annoys me. but Mellodi's name is spelled awesome!! Ive never seen it spelled like that before :)

update soon (or I'll die jk)

Taylor! :)

Aww, it's so cute. I can already tell that Kitty has a sweet heart. I bet their relationship is going to blossom into something much bigger later. I love it.
MagicWords

I'm going to be honest and say that there is WAY too much dialogue in this story.

I know there was a warning at the beginning to read your other story, but even in a spin-off story, by Chapter 5, there should be at least some information about motivations and plot development. Character development can occur later, but most authors usually choose not to write that way.

The dialogue is written well, but there isn't much else to go on here. Happy writing!

Hi :) This seems cute so far. I think you can elaborate on the characters more though. Alex and Kitty seem bland to me so far. For a guy who doesn't talk much, he has no problem talking a lot in narrative. I like how the chapters are short and sweet though.

Good and brillaint!, Me LOVEES it. x