It's a cute story. I really like Chris. Valarie is cool too, but I need to find out more about her. Can't wait for the next chapter.

lmfao

Hahaha lovin it. =] I love how Chris always interrupts Valarie - it makes me laugh.

Shouldn't it technially be FSL? Cause the story is written in 3rd person, so... hehehe XD Sorry, I tend to notice weird things.
I hate how he has a lip piercing. That just bothers me. :)

LOL LOVE THE END BIT! I really like this chapter I also like how Val doesn't come off as this ** that Megan makes her out to be in her mind. But WOAH the holding hand bit between Megan and Chris I sense a love triangle blooming.

You know how to draw people in. FOOD! And the titles! They make me wanna go to the bakeshop nearby my house. :P

NO, no, nonononono! You gotta update man! Like, really fast, cuz I like it!

So, as this is my first review, it's normal for me to write something REALLY long and helpful, but since your story is really still at the beginning, that won't work. Of the four chapters I noted a couple things: you have GREAT punctuation and grammar (those are my pet peeves, if you don't get them right I won't waste my time reading your story), you handle... sex scenes very well, and you are really turning love into hate. I think the first two are rather self-explanatory, so I'll skip to the third. Basically, this guy Chris finds her extremely annoying and she him, but the ending of this chapter implies something else. What you've done here is created a feeling of disharmony that will help aid you in creating a more interesting introduction to the story. It also makes the reader curious to how they will turn out in the end.

~ Princess

whoaa...

cute plot. XD I'll be following this..

Too lazy to log in right now. three words darling... you are AMAZING. Love the detail. Can't wait to see you develop this!!

I want the next chapter and I WANT IT NOW!

I love your humor.
I really like English cake boy's character. This definitely takes a turn from most stories, and that only intrigues me more. Excited for the next update.

Wow, the English cake boy is a douchebag. I wonder what he's going to do next. Good job.

Haha! I'm loving this story so far! I'll be faving it as soon as I re-find my password. Valerie grates my nerves, but at the same time she's such a unique and confident character that I can't help but admire her.
You're writing flows and is so natural, this is the kind of book that I would actually buy and re-read. (If I weren't always broke, lol)
I'll be watching out for this story for sure, please update soon!

hahahaha Valerie and that guys convo was madd funny.

"you cannot be serious"
"like a heart attack"


gah lmfao. rotfl

LOL, this could be even more amusing than it already is. I'd personally play up the darkly funny and quirky aspects of this story for the best results, but it's your story and I'd still love to see where it goes.

I love how Valarie knows what's going to happen, but chooses to make a scene anyway. What an interesting character.

Thank you for this story.