I liked the imagery, but maybe try to reduce the spacing in between the lines (try single-spacing) because it's easier to read.
Really nice poem, the repetition of "the weight of the world watches in soil" really drives things home.

The imagery, tone, and flow was just really well done. My only suggestion would be stanzas. Keep writing. =)

This has an extraordinary use of nature in creating scene and tone. I like how this weaves through different mental dimensions while staying true to the overall resonance. Great write. MD:77.

[descriptions/images] "Voices like cobras" I love that! What a vivid description. I like how strong that sounds; I can just hear the hissing in poem.

[word choice] "The weight of the world will lunge for my chest." The usage of the word 'lunge' is wonderful. I like how dark and spiteful that seems. As if the weight of the world is aiming for someone in particular, watching them.

[Word play] I like the touch of alliteration in the beginning with "springtime storms". It added more poetic quality to the piece, which is really important since this is free-verse.

[tone] "That is the weight of the world." has to be one of the best lines in this. The tone for it is wonderful! It sounds so profound and honest, knowing. :)

[Other] Single-spaces and stanzas would make this much better. That's really my only complaint. The double-spaces are distracting, and single-spaced stanzas would make this clearer and easier to read. (Document Manager: Hold shift while pressing enter or backspace to single-space up or down.)

-Peach, RG depth review.

"Soil by lamplight." I like how ambiguous this line is - the word 'soil' suggests that light can either 'illuminate the soil on the ground' or that 'light itself can create darkness' - both interpretations are shocking and vivid.

"Eyelid portals." Good. You took something cliche (i.e. the old adage: the eyes are the windows to the soul) and made it your own - adding a time-travelling element to the imagery with the word 'portal.' Excellent work here - tres creative.

"That is the weight of the world." This is probably my favourite line - the tone itself is wonderfully honest and profound. The reader can't help but bask in the speaker's wisdom. This was a lovely piece. I enjoyed reading it.

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I really like the imagery in this piece. From the very first line I get a strong picture of a forest at night, with you standing in a small opening lifting a lamp up. It's beautiful, and very intensely evoked. The entire poem is full of similar very strong images, which I really enjoyed.

The word choice was also excellent. I especially liked the description "open eyelid portals," and the idea that the snakes' eyes were physical passageways to the center of the earth. The choice to use 'open eyelid' also interesting, as eyelids are generally only remarked upon when they're closed, and snakes, of course, do not have eyelids.
Another bit of word play that I liked was the fact that the speaker wanted to hear the addressee's name from his/her lips. Typically one sees such a construction the other way around ('I need to hear you speak my name one last time' or some such), and I liked the fact that the speaker was in control, if also controlled by his/her emotions and/or surroundings.

I will say that I didn't care for the repetition of 'the weight of the world watches in silence.' Although I liked the first iteration, and the idea behind it, the second time felt heavy. I also didn't care for the assonance/rhyming qualities of "In place and in space." Because the rest of the piece didn't rhyme, the use of place/space, especially in the same line, felt jarring and, pardon the pun, out of place.

Overall, I really enjoyed this piece, and I liked the message it was trying to convey. The idea of being weighed down by the world and its demands/problems/etc., is one I can sympathize with, as is the idea of the toxicity of that weight.

Wow, I genuinely enjoyed this!

I liked the personification of the trees and animals in this poem, via statements like

"Forest trees hiss your name in springtime storms."

because it turns the inanimate into the threatening.

I also liked your character development. In a fairly short poem, you give the reader such a sense of this person and their situation.

Great work, again!

"Tree roots rise as mothers’ arms,

Holding me by the feet,

In place and in space.

They center my gravity."

I love the image of stability you painted with those lines. It was an interesting break from context, what with the rest of poem carrying an unfriendly, frightening feeling. For me, this poem paints a clear image of someone weathering storms and the wilderness in hopes of a loved one's return. You carried the tone of the poem well, and I couldn't find a single error. :)

Well done,

-Ramen