"Peel off layers of deception." I like this opening line - it's quite interesting to think that negativity can 'attach' itself to our bodies and 'profane' us, in a sense. Kudos for being creative and original.

"I listen to your breathing as we hold hands and feel our reason slowly slip away." BEAUTIFUL!

"We will fade." This is my favourite line - it's honest and sorrowful, and yet, it doesn't detract from the 'power' of these people's love at all.

Keep up the good work. :)

Formatwise, I don't really like pieces that are all italicied. It just doesn't seem to emphasize anything. Also, I'm not sure why you used two dots instead of one or three

"i listen to your breathing/deafened with my own"... deafened seemed like an odd word choice here

Other than that I like the piece a lot. It's very sweet, but some of the imagery is really, well not sweet (like the first line). The ending is really great as well. Very powerful imagery.

I really like this. You never really get over someone you loved. Or at least I don't. Very good Poem.

very well written, I like this. Great pen name by the way :)