I'm really thoroughly enjoying this play. I love Romeo and Juliet anyway but this is such a good modern twist!! I love how you keep some of the origional dialogue from the play in there, too!
Please, please, PLEASE keep updating!

wonderful!

This sentence is a little awkward "She's only just turning seventeen" I would suggest either 'She's only just turned seventeen' or 'She's barely seventeen'

I am really liking this. Please update soon!

Wow you've done really good, turning the classic into modern times. I tried to do it for a class project once, I couldn't do it. Congrats!! Please write more.

One of my many favorite Shakespearean plays!
I enjoy your story highly!
Update soon!

"critically acclaimed boobs and ass" lolz!

love this! keep writing this one! The sentence "An arrogant airhead with an overly inflated ego he was" is a bit awkward. I would recommend just eliminating the words 'he was' b/c we all know who you're talking about.

This is by far the most awesome-ist play remake ever. I've been hearing the original R&J for years and years and just seeing how you transformed it made my day.

You kick ass.

My favorite quote, "I do not bite my thumb at you sir, but I do bite my thumb," has just gotten even better, "I’m not flipping you off, but I do raise it,”

You rock my friggen socks

-Val

Awesome Tori! Can't wait to read more! You were really creative with the stage directions and stuff like that. A little heavy with the swearing, but who cares? lol I bet Wolgie would like die if he read this. Good job, and I wanna read more soon!

Yay! You posted!

Hm, track eh? I'm guessing that's based on a certain someone. Which makes me wonder why a combination of me and Mel is in love with him, haha.

I was also surprised that you still used the family feud. Going with the high school idea, I would have thought that it would have just been social issues at school. I'm sure you have your plans, though.

As for the writing, it was pretty good. Very descriptive *applsuse* and it had a good tone/mood (yeah, sorry Wolgy, you failed. I still don't know the difference).

I liked how you talked about the stuffed animals and such on the memorial. It made it clear that it was in the present time.

And the monologue...just wouldn't be an R&J story without it, would it? Haha. It would have made more sense to have it modernized...maybe it was referencing the actual play?

Definitely looking forward to reading on! Update this soon and I might re-post some of BoL~ (might being the operative word).