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KelaBelle 2009-07-29 . chapter 1
WOW VERY VERY NICE.
NC Greer 2009-07-29 . chapter 1
This is a nice piece of flash fiction. You build both charcters fully in less that 200 words and that can't be easy. Like the 2nd person narrative. Good Story.
Ramenluver 2009-07-29 . chapter 1
"‘perspective,’."

You can omit the comma.

"So you smile at him, but you don’t say anything, you understand that he thinks differently than you, but you’re still angry all the same."

The first comma should be a semicolon.

I particularly love this piece because I am an artist, and I can relate. :) The ending line was a knock-out, and made me giggle.

Nicely done,

-Ramen
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