I would like to see the images in this poem stretched out more. I read that you like Kim Addonizio...I'm reading a book by her now called "Ordinary Genius." One of her suggestions for editing poems is this: "See how microscopic you can be, and then pull back as needed. Revise toward significant detail." She also suggests this: "Is there so much surprise that the reader is left with nothing else? Is it so predictable that the poem has no movement from where it opened to where it ends?" I think you should take these words to heart and try to get to the heart of where you think this poem is headed. Good luck!

I would love for you to tell me what this poem is about! I'm really not sure what the theme is, but it seems so cool, I'd like to know. :D "A coastline, where everything is sculpted together"? Were the phrases showing a similarity? Or... a sort of together-ness? Anyway, I enjoyed reading it. I read it quite a few times. :)

I love your word choices. They were creative, not 'stale'.

Thank you for sharing!