This metaphor is amazing!
"with those summertime smiles &
those merry-go-round merriments,"
-Love these lines!!
Great writing :)

i love this and hate it at the same time.
love it, because it's amazing.
hate it, because it's got me thinking maybe this is what i'm doing.
with seth.
hmm. i need some serious thinkage to occur right about now.

oh, and i loved the parenthesis :D

Wow that's really good. Great metaphor and some realy nice phrases.

I would love opinions from a writer like yourself on my work, it would mean a lot.