|Reviews for Rough Diamond|
| Salark 10/8/09 . chapter 4
I don’t know how the other readers feel but I’d much rather quality over quantity. I don’t mind if the chapters are a little short, as long as they are written well.
I didn’t think that this chapter was tedious to read at all. I actually liked it. I also like the way you do the flashback sequence, where Nate and Kieran are in the washroom and it goes from what happening in there to that morning. I like how you do that.
And as for a favourite character? I love Kieran so far. He just so ... I don’t know. I love how he comes on to Nate and Nate gets all flustered. It’s cute. I also like Nate.
I also just like your style of writing in general. I think it’s engaging, and you give lots of detail without dragging it out and making everything boring. You also give your characters personality. I hate when I read something and all the characters are flat and boring.
Sorry I’m crap at giving constructive criticism.
Love the story so far, you deserved all 16 reviews and I hope you update soon!
| bluelee 10/8/09 . chapter 4
Really like it so far. Lots of possibilities and so-far unanswered questions. Looking forward to the next update.
| Tanaka Maya L 10/8/09 . chapter 4
Your chapter wasn't tedious or anything. :3 I enjoyed reading it.
And I would like to be a beta-reader but... unfortunately I have exams in about two weeks. Damn, if only they didn't exist. xD
But anyway, really looking forward to your next chapter, and I'd have to say my favourite character so far would have to be... Nate. Because I think everyone else is irritating in some way, but Kieran would have to come a close second because he's just a classic, and I want to know his reasons. :3
| Aarosha 10/7/09 . chapter 4
I like the chapter, for sure.
But it felt a little choppy.
And it needed a little bit of lines to seperate the scene changes.
For instance, in the beginning, Nate is in the bathroom with Kieran and suddenly we get an awkward transition about the morning and then back to the bathroom scene again.
If you're gonna do something like show a past event, make sure it's in it's own seperate paragraph or it's being described by a person who experienced it.
But, I liked it overall. ]
As for your question of a fav character.
Umm... I'm not too sure yet.
As you've definitely shaped the personalities of the characters.
I feel that I don't know them completely.
So, well see. ;]
Finallyy, to polish off this obnoxiously long review, I'd like to propose.
To be your beta, that is.
| frogs of war 10/7/09 . chapter 4
My favorite is definitely Kieran. He knows what he wants and he's patiently working towards it. He would be less mysterious (and perhaps less interesting) if Nate talked to him, but you give perfectly plausible reasons that he doesn't. I can't see Nate thinking about anything other than the moment when Kieran is whispering in his ear.
| Skyelair Kakei 10/7/09 . chapter 3
Well... you can only say so much about the first few chapters while the story is developing, eh? :)
I must say I enjoy your story so far. I've been looking for interesting slash stories; the title of this one caught my eye Love Stephanie, I actually think I act like her. XDD And I absolutely love Nate's character. Kieran, on the other hand, scares the hell outta me... O o; -pokes Kieran- You stalker man...
| the cow on the box 10/7/09 . chapter 3
Great story ! I like it !
Did Nate take some drug or something ? If he don't remember the night weeding...
Kieran is like a stalker
| Sly-Girl1055 10/6/09 . chapter 3
hey! I'm glad you have started updating more, even if its only two chapters :P
I'm really looking forward to more, so keep it coming! (and I wouldn't complain about longer chapters! :P)
| enigmatic.allure 10/5/09 . chapter 3
This is to be one of the most interesting stories I've came across fictionpress in a long time.
The story line seems to be cliche but not really. I like that it has a twist.
I'm so looking forward to more Nate and Kieran interaction and I want to know what happened at the wedding. Nate went to the wedding but can't remember what happened? Can you at least tell us what he remembered? I"m loving this... the suspense is killing me :)
Honestly, I don't like Jason. I don't think he's being a good friend but that's all part of the story.
Can't wait for more update. I'm checking it daily for updates!
Keep up the great work!
| Tanaka Maya L 10/5/09 . chapter 3
This is actually pretty good. It's so hard to find interesting stories with good characters on this site, and I'm so glad I was bored enough to try searching again for one today. You really caught my interest with this. You have got a few typos, but nothing terrible, and they're easy to read past.
So I'm looking forward to when you update. (:
| Nineheart 10/5/09 . chapter 3
:( Last line made me sad. Hmm...I'm intrigued, what did happen at the wedding I wonder...
| DreamsOnlyLastForTheNight 10/5/09 . chapter 3
this story has really caught my interest
i really want to know what happened at that wedding
jason seems to wrapped up in his girlfriend, i don't really like him that much
| frogs of war 10/5/09 . chapter 3
If Nate is missing a few hours from two years ago and Kieran doesn't know he lost them, then Kieran is probably feeling pretty low right now. He sees the guy he met before and he's all excited to talk to him again, but he is treated like a total stranger. Worse than a total stranger because Nate actively dislikes him.
I wonder what happened at the wedding and why Nate lost two hours. That's not normal.
I just discovered you Saturday (from someone's favorites list) and I don't know why I didn't leave a review. I normally always do.
| AshenCourt 10/5/09 . chapter 3
Hi, me again, thanks for the mention.
Brilliant chapter. I love the story I just wish you could write a bit more in the chapters. Kieran is so mysterious and just as I'm begining to make guesses he's gone. The whole no memory thing is interesting too. Please keep writing and update as soon as you can.
I'll try to keep reviewing every chapter for you. Reviews are nice to get.
Thanks for writing again.
| Iscatian 10/5/09 . chapter 3
Oh, wow. Is it only me, or did this story just take a way more serious turn? Amnesia? Things hidden in the past that may be should STAY hidden in the past? Kieran being lonely? I wasn't expecting drama of this magnitude, but as long as you as the autour feel like you can handle it I'm game. :)
I feel I really understand the main character, which is always good for a story, and it's going to be exciting to see how long he can resist Kieran, and how Kieran still remembers him after two years. But I really hope this isn't the dark kind of story where Kieran raped or otherwise hurt Nate and now he can't remember because he's suppressing his memories! o_O' I want person with lovely name to be NICE person. (
This was a fast update, which is nice, but be careful so you don't take on to great a plot for you to deal with in the realtively short chapters you write. Plot is nice, but so is character interaction. A reader is happiest when given a healthy dose of each, along with some sparkling chemistry... :P
Hope you get more reviews!