i loved the fifth stanza of the poem... you are such a good writer!

The imagery here is beautiful!
I like how the first and last stanzas have been separated from the others.

~painted

"They’d met in Autumn’s magic, loved in Winter’s snow,

Danced in springtime rain, and hoped in Summer’s glow."
-- Love these lines!!

Heck, I love them all! But I am sure you don't want a review filled with me copy and pastin and saying it! But you areso very talented!! It evokes so much emotion!! Go you!!

The last stanza makes the poem even more beautiful by the way :)

"Swept over paths of frost. Hoping she would find, a memory she'd lost." I love this part. The 'memory palace' imagery here is incredible. I like the idea that Autumn strolls along the paths of her mind in search for a memory - that's beautiful and very creative.

"And weeping she remembered, that laughing loving man, who’d lived with aging looks, as she in youth still ran." Oh God. That's so heart-breaking. An immortal woman fell in love with a mortal man. He ages and she doesn't. Now the speaker knows why Autumn sings. This part is so profound. :D

"Their time a fleeting dream." I love this line so much. It basically sums up my ideas about life and love: it seems like one moment of 'now.'

"Fell to bathe the wind." This is a very powerful line. The 'tear' imagery here is wonderful. Nice use of the word 'bathe,' as well.

This was an excellent poetic-story. :)

Wow!, this is amazing great job. I take it tis about the seasons passing in cycle, great job!

AH!!
Why do you insist on upsetting me!
So so good... yet, so so sad!!

She needs another one! or he needs to be reincarnated every cycle so they can be tohether every time he comes back!

waa.

The enchantment continues. Now we know why Autumn sings. Because she loved and lost a mortal man "who'd lived with aging looks." I think you've made all of us fall in love with Autumn and now we'll see her with new vision "as she followed ruby paths." I have just one suggestion: change "a fleeting dream" to "fleeting dreams" so it will rhyme better with "frosty seams."

I liked the touch of love you added to the poem by the rhyme. I rhyme almost all of my poems, but I'm still struck by the consistency of your rhyme and flow, it's doubtlessly one of the most enjoyable aspects of your poems. The vocab is refreshing again, with loving expressions like 'on the wind' 'verdant verse' etc. You're truly gifted!
~fleur

That's a nice thought to think how the spirit of fall watched over the couple and helped them to mature as lovers. I really felt a strong essence of fall in here which I love and now long for (though I always think that until my fingers start loosing their dexterity, my nose starts running and my toes become numb after being outside for a while, dreaded poor circulation.) Anyway I really liked this story and also that you incorporated different styles of writing into it, very cool stuff.

I liked this little story and enjoyed how you included some of the major elements of the opening poem into it. The idea was good, I like how you personified the seasons in such depth, keeping also with the natural theme (darkness, leaves, life, death, moon, light, etc...) The only thing that seemed out of place was the mention of the knife, but that was such a minute detail I don't think it really affected the rest of the piece (and I'm just being critical, please forgive me.) Again I loved the natural air of the whole thing which reminded me of the beauty of each season. Very good stuff.

I loved the opening stanza of this poem and in truth, I thought the whole thing was very good. The rhyming was great and the air of the whole piece was lovely. I think it had a very natural feel and the imagery was rich yet not overpowering. Very awesome!

"Autumn watched the love below." What a beautiful opening for the poem - it's so perfect!

"And so the lovers met, beneath a falling sky." The 'falling star' imagery here is absolutely brilliant - it's both romantic and spiritually profound.

"Hearts began to bind." This entire stanza in and of itself was beautiful - especially the 'violet, autumn day' part. :)

That was awesome. The whole poem was very well written, and very descriptive. Good job.

Fantastic!
I won't flatter myself by thinking I inspired such a beautiful poem. Just knowing that I nudged you in the right direction is enough. I love "shyful" - a blend of "shy" and "bashful." You may have overused "claret" a bit. But overall a suberb song as sweet as Autumn herself.

Aw, cute :) I love the continuity in your poetry too :) So very pretty!