The insight into Nicholas' past was very cool, I like the subtle cultural differences as well, particularly the magic paper. Fairheim...seems a bit odd.

This has an intriguing start, and Nicholas seems like an endearing character. Not sure what to make of Roger, he seems like a bit of a sneaky cat. Can't wait to read further!

two genies!? I knew disney left out something important!

very interesting plot. I'm hooked!

. . . Wow. o_0 I have no idea what's going on, but that's to be expected. So, OMGWTF? This last part was especially trippy. And that boy crawling on the floor naked brought to mind all sorts of bad horror movies that are now going to make me have nightmares. *shudder*

I like the characters.

It sounds like Maria is scared of him...possibly because she knows what he is? I'm so curious!

I really like this story and can't wait to find out what Nicky *and* Roger are, for I think Roger was right when he said he wasn't a vampire. So very, very curious!

I do hope though that you find a title for this story... I think less people might give the story a chance because it's untitled... I know I nearly passed it over because of it. :S And what a shame it would have been to miss it... :S

Well, best of luck to you (with the writing)!

Trinkie

i really like Roger's character and think that nick has a lot of potential. i hope you're still writing this story. update soon please!

very very interesting. I can't wait for more.

Roger is quickly becoming a favorite character. Nicholas too even though we didn't get to see much of him in this chapter.
I wonder what was up with Roger hearing Nick's voice.

Also, congratulations on making this very non-cliche. I had a couple predictions of where this story was going to go and I'm pleasantly surprised at how wrong I was.

Wow. This plot seems rather intricate. In a good way. I'm a huge fan of fantasy but it's not very often i come across a good one.

I shouldn't judge yet considering it's only the second chapter but this has MAJOR potential and i like where it's going so far.

I'm happy to have found this story. I should have raided your profile ages ago after I first read WMS. (Which is a brilliant piece of work btw and i absolutely adore it... voted for it in Skow)

So anyway, great first chapter!

Wait, wait, wait, wait. THis story continues, doesbn't it? Good. I kind alike it. The beginnig was a bit unreal though, what with him getting attached to Nikway too easily. But then, from te oter chapters I sort of got a fell that it's going to be something deep and with a reason. The scene with the girl 9roger;s meal) was really something, and it totally changed how I classify this story (a good thing, I'll have you know) It seems like everyone isn't loaded with hormones (most stories even with/without teens have way too much hormonal influence it gets repetitive).
It's a pretty good read as well. Enough happened that I don't classfiy it as slow, but it gives a fair amount of detail. Keep at it!

I'm sorry I haven't been able to review this latest chapter until now, dollface. Time has gotten away from me! School is just...relentless this semester, and I don't know how it got to be, but there it is.

Anyway, this isn't about me. I am enjoying this story so much! I love that the supernatural beings aren't all one thing or another, and Mohan's make completely intrigues me. I am trying to figure out what exactly he is, if not something you've completely made up in your head.

[He even described the suit he wore, how odd it was, and especially how it didn’t fit him properly. Mohan wasn’t so interested in that part.] This was terribly cute, for some reason! How Roger recalled the way the suit fit Nicholas oddly. Just such a charming detail that really fits his sort of confident and...maybe even a bit spacey personality. Spacey isn't quite right, but I love how he seems to be a step removed from things, at times, of his own doing. Like he has his own motivations, and screw what everyone else wants him to do. He's his own person. Vampire.

The back-and-forth between him and Mohan is very comfortable, too. I almost wish they were the couple of the story, but I am so excited to see what things happen with Nick and Roger, and the rest of them along the way. And I have to say, I am already a bit uneasy about Mohan's fate. Though, he is such a trooper. The half-demon bite, especially has me intrigued. It's sad that a). he's seemingly going at it alone, and b). Roger sees the change, but can't really step outside of their set relationship roles to say anything.

And the way you're introducing Nicholas into Roger's thoughts and life so delicately is ace. I am glad for him not being the typical, bloodlust vampire, who's aggressive and forward about getting what he wants, and that's that. Roger, in contrast, seems almost confused about his attraction to Nicholas. Or maybe not confused, but...curious! At least curious. :D It's charming, like the rest of him!

Please do keep posting more of this. I am jonesing to see your world unfold. :))

Great!! Update soon! :]

So excited to see another story from you. Excellent plot, characters, and writing as usual.