Great chapter! I;m so happy you updated. I hope everything is going good for you ]

I almost thought that Trick was going to ask Bobbi to marry him at the New Year's Eve party thing. But then I got to thinking and it was a little early and he didn't have a ring... not that he needs one but still... LOL

Anyway, can't wait till the next chapter D

Glad to see you're back ma'am.

first i just wanted to say that i hope everything is going better for you. i was wondering if the sister is going to get bitched out at any point though?

WHO! Thank you, thank you, thank you! I've missed this story so much! I'm studying for my last two finals tomorrow and getting extremely stressed out, and I checked my email before going back to studying and saw this and did a happy dance. I'm so thankful for this wonderful distraction, you did a great job, and it definitely brightened up my sucky day! Welcome back friend! :)

im glad you're still alive

hahahaa

im happy to see a new chapter

i liked this one it's showing what trick wants to do

update soon

rathina

Welcome back! A little heavy on the sappiness, but still a good filler chapter. Are we going to hear more about Jake and Amy? You keep offering tantalizing bits, then nothing. I realize the main story is about Jake and Bobbi but...

I just have to say that your story is wonderful. I have enjoyed every minute of it. I don't think that I have laughed quite as much with a story as I have with this one. I'm surprised that I just came upon this story today. I love these kinds of stories and the simplicity of it all.

I also want to say that I am very sorry for your loss. You probably get that a lot but I know that it's not the easiest thing in the world to lose someone close to you. So again sorry and your writing is amazing.

I dont think there is anything i can say that hasnt already been said, but i'm sorry for your loss despite it.

You said you were revising what you had written, i dont think there is any possible way you could make this story better but i appluad your eforts and look forward to reading it again. You should think about getting this story published, you know. Its really well written and slightly adictive. You could try posting on Authonomy, because publishers supposedly review the site for good story's. Any ways, you should check it.

Take your time in updating, people will understand an if not...

Illegitimi non carborundum!

Thank you Andrea for a wonderful story. I love that you glimpses of your faith shine through your writing. I am sorry about your boyfriend. My thoughts and prayers go out to you and his family for his ultimate sacrifice and what you must be going through. May God give you peace in the knowledge that he is waiting for you in heaven.

I understand, and offer my condolences, as superficial as that sounds. I hope that God gives you the strength to get through this and to emerge better because of it. I will pray for you.

Katie

First off, I 'found' your stories about a week after your last update. It's very impressive how much your writing has improved since you started on FP.

I want to thank you for sharing such a personal message with the internet.

I'm sure you don't want to hear this again, but I'm sorry. It's harder to say things about someone I've never met to another someone I've also never met, but I'm going to try. I lost a loved one a few years back, and I can, in a way, feel your pain. Remember the way he looked at you, how he loved/really liked you. How he grinned, how he full out laughed, how he talked, how he looked when he was mad. It hurts to remember this stuff, but those are the things that made up *him*: who he was, who his legacy is.

Also,remember that it was his choice to serve in the Army, to serve his country and its people, and that he knew this might happen. I can only hope that, in that last month and a half of his life, he was at peace.

I know that this sounds as corny as it can get, but I still tear up remembering my 'loved one'. He wasn't as lucky as your guy-he had cancer and died slowly and painfully.

You're in my thoughts. If you need a listening ear,feel free to PM me.

Sincerely,

Katie

I'm terribly sorry to hear about your boyfriend. That's so horrible, and you have my deepest condolences and sympathies.

You said you were going to work on revising the older chapters while writing new ones, so I thought I'd share my opinion. I am a fan of your stories, but this one is hard for me to read and I don't know why. One of the biggest things for me is that your main character is a major contradiction. You try to maintain that she's not a very sociable person, that she doesn't have any friends, and that she's one of the quieter people in her family. All of that was in the first few chapters, and then completely contradicted in the other chapters. People say hi to her, she has Amy and other friends. I have no problem with Bobbi the way that she is-headstrong, loud, obnoxious almost to a fault. But if she's going to be that way, you can't write that she isn't. It was hard for me to read because it said she was a quiet person, very reserved, and then the next second she was teasing boys she didn't even know before meeting Jake... like chapter 2 or something. She also yelled at guys about her truck. Understandable, but if she's a quiet person, she's not doing that. Her brothers are also somewhat of a contradiction. You said they were overprotective of her and they are, to a certain degree, but at the same time, they just let Trick do whatever to her. If she had an overprotective brother, he would not have let Trick kiss her the first second he met her. You do a good job with showing that they're not completely at ease with Trick and Bobbi by some of their facial expressions and what not before they finally chuckle it off or something, but still, some of the descriptions and then the events that follow don't add up.

I love Trick. His character is very believable, aside from the fact that he seems to love Bobbi already. Liking her a lot, being intimidated by her, feeling stupid and silly around her, are all good... but I don't feel like he can love her yet. It's been... what, three weeks?

Finally, the story progresses at sporadic paces. For like... five chapters they were in Columbus, at the game, at the dinner, watching movies. And then it was a week later and she was on the farm for a day and one chapter. It just seems like a strange progression for one day to take up five chapters and one week to take up one.

I hope this was helpful. My intentions aren't to be mean, but to be constructive. This was what I saw in your story that didn't add up or made it difficult at times to read. Thank you for sharing your stories, though. They always make me happy to read, and I look forward to new chapters (and revised old ones?) whenever you have time.

You are an amazing writer. I was a little worried that there wasn't going to be any conflict when i started reading the story, but this is one of the best stories that i have read all year. You are very knowledgeable about what you write, and the storyline is completely enthralling. I love the characters, especially the morals and the consistency of each characters personality. This is definitely something that i would pick up in a bookstore and buy if it were a published peice of work. Also a great read that i intend to reccomend to many people. :)

I'M SO SORRY. WHY ARE YOU SORRY? I can't imagine what you must be going through. ):

You write beautifully and I'm sure you'll find a way through this.

I am so sorry to hear about your boyfriend, I know you most likely hear that a lot. I spent 10 years in the Military Police and have gone everywhere.I know its hard, but you will get through it. I lost several of my buddies and they were like family to me. I feel your loss and the loss of a great soldier. Take your time and when your ready the words will flow.

BPG