I don't find it at all believable that Lysandra has known Blaze for only three days and has such trust in him. "It's just a feeling" is a terrible justification for this. (I find it impossible to believe that she was curious enough to ask him what was wrong with him, but isn't even curious enough to ask him who he killed or why he did it.)

"and a second thought she corrected him." -This doesn't make sense...

"He shot her a dangerous look, as if for daring to correct her" -I think you change the gender of the Warden here...

And I don't think he would call them "bad ways". A more eloquent synonym to "bad", maybe...

This is really good...I think I'm gonna nominate this for FPSSA...

I liked this chapter, too...Blaze seems...interesting...

It seems like there should be a bit more build-up, though, maybe, with that whole 'he's-really-a-creepy-pervert' thing...I dunno...

This is brilliant...You are a refreshingly skilled writer, and this seems very interesting...

If you're going to write about characters with psychological conditions, make sure you do a lot of research on those conditions. For example, most people think schizophrenia is only about hallucinating, but it's actually much more complex than that.

I think you can do much more to build up character development in both Blaze and Zach.

And it's hard for me to believe that people in a mental institution would be allowed to wander off by themselves, particularly if they were dangerous like Zach.

really enjoying this so far and can't wait to read what happens next.

I like this. I'd be interested in reading more.