I really like the line: "With eyes of wishful skies".

Keep up the good work.

~painted

I love the way this one elevates you at the end. The message is clearly of hope and second chances, which I think is lovely. The phrase "claret dreams" stuck with me the most, and I actually had to look it up to place it in context.

In reading this, it seemed to me that there was an unchanging element to our protagonist - immortal perhaps? - or perhaps just reflective.

Your use of alliteration in the first two lines is effective - drawing the reader into the scene.

"Grey gravestones." Striking assonance.

"Claret dreams." I like the repetition of this line - it ties the piece together well and enhances the male character's depth.

"Of which he'd never knew." This line is a bit awkward - try changing it to "Oh which he'd never known."

This piece flowed and rhymed quite well - you write fantasy pieces beautifully. Keep up the great work. :)

Okay, words do not describe how much I love this poem!! And Malkovich! *hugs him* Its so sad but gorgeous but hopeful but AWESOME!!

Love stories can be cliched, but I can safely say that nothing written in your style of poetry is ever cliched :D
The story is simple and message clear, yet the writing still draws me in and invites me to ponder =)
Kind of reminds me of Jane Eyre.
~fleur

A beautiful journey from despair to hope and healing. I could feel the sun rising on a renewed world. Only one line threw me: "And in her he found a peace, of which he'd never knew." That should be "he never knew" or "he'd never known."

AWW!
Another fantastic edition...
Which story are these characters from??