So maybe you didn't like it, but I pretty much LOVED this story.
I couldn't stop racing through; the plot was leaving me sure of what was going on and then all of a sudden clueless. I was hooked from the first paragraph! I loved your word choice--it was fresh and natural, but not stupid.
I felt just as delusional as Nadia when I realized what was going on, then stopped realizing it, etc.
Yay yay! This was amazing. Best oneshot I've read in a long, long time.