Another beautiful poem about Lilith. I like how you described her. The imagery fits her well. Well written.

Ooh, couldn't help reading this, as it is about my namesake!. I've always been fascinated by Lilith but had never heard her story in its entirety. I found your poem and the links you provided really helpful. Both her story and your telling of it are truly beautiful. I love the allusions you make to other texts and your inclusion of the symbolic flowers. Your imagery is great. I love this stanza:

"the sand is dirtied with the footprints of grief
the sea has taken on a small measure more salt
and the world has first known sadness"

The lack of capitalization in your first chapter kind of bothers me. Especially because you dont keep consistant with it in the second chapter. But I think that's the only thing I would change.

This was a beautiful second chapter. The imagery was vivid, and the emotion was gripping and haunting. I loved it. :D

"There are red poppies on the ground...they are wet with the salt of tears." I really liked this stanza. The imagery here is so vibrant and chilling. The contrast between the colour red (passion) and the feeling of 'coldness/harshness' (death) blends so well here - wow!

"Mourning her lost children." I love that you chose to write about Lilith - what an excellent allusion this is - it's fascinating to think that one hundred children die everyday because of her.

The 'hush' part flowed nicely into the 'white roses' part - the emotion and imagery in this section was wonderfully lush and powerful.

"She has sunk down beneath the surface of the water." This is probably my favourite line - the tone here is both angsty and heart-wrenching - the imagery is laced with sorrow.

"And the world has known sadness." What a brilliant ending. This was truly a lovely piece. I enjoyed reading it. Keep up the great work. :)

I loved this poem. I find Lilith's various mythology very fascinating also. My only suggestion would be some more punctuation. Well done.