This is a great story idea, I hope you continue. I can kind of relate because my parents are divorced. Although they got divorced when I was younger, about second or third grade, so I didn't know what was going on, but I do now. Great job!

This story needs some emotion and description. The underlying ideas are good, but it seems more like a newspaper article than a story. The reader is stuck on the outside, looking in. You want your reader right there in the story.

The little girl sat in the grass, surrounded by familiar faces. They looked at her dotingly, with soft eyes and warm smiles. Those were the best days of her life. Everyone seemed to get along, bonding over the birthday of a little girl. They never agreed on anything, but they agreed that Nikki was adorable and innocent. That was her fourth birthday party, before everything went to hell in a handbasket.

Haha. Okay... I may have gotten a little carried away. See how the emotions and the discription pull you in. (Well... hopefully, otherwise I made a fool of myself.) The idea is to wrap everything up in a nice little narrative.

I like the idea how her parents are from two different backgrounds, that always makes for an interesting family life. Like, my mom grew up in a nice part of town and my dad grew up on a farm. They love eachother, but my relatives never really see eye to eye.

Her dad seems like a jerk. My daddy is no jerk though. :)

Thanks for the read.