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simpleplan13 2009-08-09 . chapter 1
I really liked the piece as a poem. I think the personification of the moon was really great. My issue is with it as a haiku. Splitting that word halfway through just to fit a syllable count seems silly to me. Just make it a short poem not in haiku style or work on the syllables. Still it's nicely written/.

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tonight we bloom 2009-08-05 . chapter 1
I like the simplicity of this. It has a nice tone to it, too.

I also loved how you said "wide-eyed," it added a nice touch to this haiku.

Beautiful write, once again!
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