Exactly, school started and I, too, am distracted from writing and reading. (can't help if I happen to enter the toughest and scariest cegep of my province...*shiver* so scary)

Ok back to your lovely story.

I've got no super talents, no secret swords, or expensive blood. I'm normal. -I like this part a lot, lol expensive blood!

Yes, I'll marry you. He laughed and then said (in all seriousness), “Go on a quest with me.”

Quest is such a lame word. “Uh...a quest for what?”

(HAHAHAHA, [nice one!)

wow they are crazy LOL in a insane (good) way. Go little evil Knights!

leather yum ;]]

omgeezus 5 stars.

Oh at least Shadow has the courtesy to stay there until Mathias is awake. and serve him... blood... well for free, darling. 0_0 interesting!

Can;t he just offer him a high concentrated alcohol and send the poor Mathias on a drunken trip to nowhereland so the Watcher will feel like a silly person? LOL OK I AM HYPER NOW! Especially school starts tomorrow, new scary competitive school. and in the same day, I am supposed to have a math test in which I haven't yet studied... oh shoot. *sobbing, hugging my fictional characters in my brain*

“How are you talking?” He retorted and he trotted off, “stupid humans.” LOL I LOVE THIS CAT! *kidnap*

I craved meat. Raw meat, and lots of it. (You better not eat the cat! No run kitty) oh... the girl grabbed him in time... cool.

Oh my, Matty is getting tortured by shadow. Good heaven, he fainted again! hahaha

WOW! This Shadow guy is smex! Speaking of Shadow, had a wild cat named that when I was a tiny little kid.

WOW MORE WOW when Shadow and Mathias reached the non-main road area (which is probably the right place for naughty stuff)

Puppy eyes, man how I am scared of them. Got that trauma before. You see there was this girl who kept using hers on me for years. *shiver*

Wow what? He just chased him out after that ... floating boot thingy? GASP!

next!

The beginning was a little difficult to get into. I think it was because it started off with too much description and imagery without giving the reader a strong sense of who the narrator even is. If there's a bodiless narrator going on and on about a description without giving a scene, or describing a character's actions, it'll most likely be a little boring.