really epic poem. nice job:)

Sounds depraved, but a hint of sexual frustration as well.

Loved this, quite frankly. It had an air of rambling but rambling with a direction, if that makes any sense. The imagery was amazing and in general, this was well-written. The only thing I didn't like was the repeat of "bleed" at the beginning. I think you could've used a different word, it was too soon to repeat it. But other than that, nicely done.