 Little girl Big world 2009-09-26 . chapter 1I love the structure of this poem. You can feel the emotion bhind each word, a great piece. |
 tonight we bloom 2009-08-15 . chapter 1i love the formatting in this piece, it really adds to the depth and meaning of this poem.
beautiful work, as always :) |
 Isca 2009-08-12 . chapter 1Holy cow. The last stanza completely blew me away. Wow. The fact that the speaker suggests that the other person can't be in a relationship with them anymore and then proceeds to say that they themselves don't feel like living anymore because of that is just so...raw, honest, and moving! :D |
 East-0f-Eden 2009-08-09 . chapter 1i really like how the poem is all consise it makes you feel like you are squeezed into a little tiny space. |
 a silenced revolution 2009-08-09 . chapter 1so stark, the sadness is conveyed. i hope you're doing okay. |
 simpleplan13 2009-08-09 . chapter 1"sandwitched"... sandwiched... I do like that word choice though. That whole stanza was really good. Great description.
For the most part I liked the format, but the break between the second and third stanza seemed a bit awkward to me.
I like the ending, very sad, but witty at the same time.
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 star blanket river child 2009-08-09 . chapter 1ouch. so much in so few words. |