 simpleplan13 2009-08-09 . chapter 1I really like the format here. It works really well to have that part in the middle and the other left justified. I think you also did well with the bolding and italics. However, I think in the second line, you could omit the you are. My everything by itslef would be less repetitive and maybe more powerful? just a though
Anyway really nice piece. Very bittersweet.
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