The most striking thing about this poem for me was the idea that she was a women purely from the waste down, and the rest of her top half was a fist. It’s so freakishly cool because it’s almost always the other way around - well, let me rephrase that, I’ve never read anything to contradict it being the other way around. And even though she is a fish with legs she is still all woman. I also loved the imagery of someone, or a group of people stumbling upon this creature and examining it with awe and giving it prestige. You treat her almost like a god, which is refreshing. Keep up the good work.

Much love,
Juliet.
Jules, via the Review Marathon (links in my profile)

"We inspect her with a stick." Ahaha. I love this line. The imagery of someone poking a naked, spread-eagled woman is just awesome.

"Whose eyes are like marble." Beautiful simile.

It may be because I'm not the biggest fan of simile, but I feel like the first few lines would be stronger as metaphor, so taking out the "as' and the "as for." Comma after "fury," period after "fever."

Period after "on," I'd say, though all of these punctuation corrections are suggestions. "glimmering" kind of cliche? Hmm. Nice use of repetition.

Humankind is one word. Not sure about "quite possibly" - all of the adverbs and unnecessary words, even "maybe," give the poem a flippant, off-hand tone I'm not sure you want. At the end of the poem...why couldn't she breathe? Was she on land, and can't breathe air? I think a little elaboration would be nice, unless I'm being stupid and missing it. :)

I definitely missed your poetry and am glad you've returned. Fantastic, consistent work.

Jules

nice twist.
beautiful use of language.
I love it.