1) "her blinds blinded her" - This sounds weird put a comma in between.

2) You had "Ohayou" in chapter one and now you have "Ohaiyo" which is actually wrong. Please be consistent (you can google this word and find out the really romanji reading)

3) "kitty-nyan" Nyan is the sound the cat makes, I think it's different here but I want you to know this.

4) spelling

"REDICULIOUS!"

"lemonai…" I know your cutting it of but it's spelt lemonade

5) very small thing but type out your numbers.

6) google "dialogue grammar" and READ IT

7) some people may talk back to me but it's ARIGATOU You have to have the "U" because the o is stretched out so the "U" is there for that.

I guess I got picker in this chapter. But yes I agree that this chapter is more interesting then ch1 But i think you can do more to attract more interest in the first chapter.

1) "It was 10 till 11:00" - make it consistent and use 10:00

2) check your spelling

"Readding"

"felling"

3) capitalize

"hastily shoving it into her..."

"for once she..."

"don't worry I..."

"she smiled as she..."

4)"So kitty-desu, feeling better?" doesn't make sense because "desu" comes at the end of a sentence ALWAYS

It's cute but there are some mistakes that shouldn't be there by simply reading it over. Please be more careful.

just wanted to say this story is so cute. I love it, I love sotry with cat boys their my favorite. I was just wondering how old is Iro(cat) and the girl? She should not be that old since u say she was in 4th grade going into 5th which means she is around 10yrs

This is so cute :D I love it! I can really see this in manga form. Maybe you could read my story, Ishiki. I'd love to hear your opinion on it :)

I really like this so far! It's interesting and cute. I hope you'll update soon!

Honestly CUTEST STORY EVA XD IRO-NYAN IS SO ON MY ANIME BOY CUTEY LIST!

SO Cute XD I love Iro-nyan XD he's so adorable! I'd love to be in Hitomi's place, having a cute little cat boy all to myself to take care of

Thank you thank you THANK YOU for wirtting this!

keep writting my friend

Awesome! I can picture her room and the cat. I'm writing a story kinda like this too; care to check it out?

when next chapter?