|Reviews for Abandoned: After the Storm|
| MagicWords 8/23/09 . chapter 3
This is all very lovely Chandra Grace! I'm so glad you're letting this character shine through! Your descriptions are lovely and I can totally tell that your writing is tremndously improving! Keep at it! I love this!
p.s. I've got some new stuff up too if you'd like to take a look at it ;)
| lionattack 8/11/09 . chapter 1
The second poem seems to repeat a lot of images from the first-hungry, bloody, the bombs, and the 'why' question. I feel like you've dealt with these in the first, and maybe if you add a third poem, explore different aspects of the situation. The man on the ground was an interesting detail, and passing him up rather than helping him was a fantastic choice-it really shows the desperate situation. I also like the level of imagery, and you've really set the atmosphere well.
A third poem would be a cool way to explore what exactly happened, or maybe delve into the character a bit more. What exactly have they lost? I know they've lost *everything* but a specific story or detail rather than a general blanket statement would help round out the speaker. Or, what are they going to do now?
I'd definately read a third poem, it's pretty spell-binding. Good job!