...beautifully written..

So deep, so charming...

(remember me... I'M THE NICE ONE!)

your work will never cease to amaze me.

"Rosewood hair." I love your use of the word 'rosewood' here - it makes the description that much more vibrant.

"Speak." The tone of this line is almost frightening - as if someone is commanding the speaker (who is presumably dead because of his 'dry veins) to talk - that's both morbid and brilliant.

I like the way in which the lines 'ruby spills,' 'he erupts,' and 'premium rose,' tie together - the flower metaphor here is beautiful and powerful. :)

Wow. Powerful piece. Especially the ending. Fabulous imagery thoughout, too. Fabulous work. Keep writing! :)

I love how you repeat the numbers near the end.

-Jessica

Epicc! EPIC I TELL YOU!

very intriguing, but good all the same :)