Oh yuck, that rapist's thoughts sicken me. He's definitely a pervert.

I don't know whether Angelina will ever start life afresh... However, I wanna learn more about Officer Robinson!

i loved it so much and i hope u write more stories this one was really good

Beautiful story! You have lots of potential to make it longer with much more drama and development of Angelina and Matt's relationship in the middle, but other than that you write really well! You have developed two really beautiful characters, excellent job!

the first thing i thought of when psycho decided to set everything on fire was that its going to be a bit awkward when the precinct realizes that angel had little to no clothes on when she was found. mat is going to have a little trouble with his job after this.

everything is going awesomely. good job!

i know you put angelina at matts house for the sake of the story, and stalker dude is really out there with his narratives. however im still kinda nervous about them being in the same apartment. it seemed a little like hero syndrome, where you become obsessed with someone who saves you. its a good story still, im just making a observation.

it figures that a guy like matt would have a bitch for a girlfriend.

*cue in the guiding light music*

i love this story so far. however, im not a huge fan of stories that are going to make me cry so im hoping theres going to be a happy ending somewhere in sight. anyway, at least she wasnt pregnant with said rapists baby. i think that would have made everything ten times worse.

'“But neither would you,” he rebuked.' Not sure 'rebuke' is quite the right word. It means 'to tell off', admonish', 'scold' etc. etc.

But more importantly - WOW! SO MUCH action in this chapter! Clayton is quite a scary name... I loved the action, I thought the way Angelina was the one to kill him was perfect, and gave HER closure as well (would she be tried, and then let off because of the circumstances? Or would they not charge her?)... I thought Matt should have/would have shot him when he had the chance, especially seeing as he was a trained policeman, but that was a minor detail.

The fight scene - y-e-s! A PROPER fight scene, with punches and kicking and people ACTUALLY getting hurt! I know that sounds really sadistic, but I can't stand it when people do 'big' fight scenes, where one person ends up with a broken finger or something, and that's it - NOT realistic. The head-vs-cement-floor thing made me wince, I have to say. :P

Only one chapter to go?? :( Hmm... how are you going to finish it, mewonders...

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Ah, the abandoned shack idea. Normally I'd say it was cliched, but in this case it was strangely fitting - and definitely creepy enough, lol! Abandoned and isolated... and terrifying. Poor Angelina! And I don't know why, but the word 'angelcakes' makes me shiver every time. It's just SUCH a pervy thing to say!

Hmm, Matt. I really want Clayton dead (r-e-a-l-l-y!), but will he suffer if he's dead? But he just HAS to be out of their lives, and the only way he'll truly be gone is if he is actually, er, gone, right? Then they can move on... I'm in two minds about it. I feel he NEEDS to die, and I WANT him to die, but is that enough of a punishment?

:) :) :)

I have to say, I loved the reactions in this chapter. There's all of the turmoil for Matt, then the conflicting emotions of his father, and the worry... Nice responses, too - Matt's father reacted in a way that seemed perfect for how I imagine his character.

What's going to happen to Angelina, though?! Is she going to get raped? Because that would be so awful, but... Ack, I don't know...

Slight contradiction:

You said "She fell to the ground, her head connecting with a tree root...", but the last line said "She didn’t even feel herself fall." Did she get up whilst 'scurrying'?

Anyway, can't wait to see what happens!

Oh my word! This story never stops - and I love it!

I can't believe that Clayton did that! And those poor policemen... that actually made me really sad, heh. I don't know how you do it, but you seem to put EXACTLY the right amount of detail into it; not too much, which would make the story drag, but not so little that the reader doesn't know what's going on. Perfect!

And - the speech stuff is all right! Y-a-y! :D

But, yes. The whole 'being followed and not being able to get away' is something everyone can relate to (in terms of nightmares) I think. The last line... Euch, that really creeped me out. *shudders*

And now I'm going to read all of the other chapters! Sorry I've been out of action for a while - computer problems, then my birthday (eep!), etc. etc.

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AH!



Best. Story. Ever.

Thank you for the happy ending.