i love the whole idea of your story...its interesting and different in my opinion..please update soon...!..:D

Peeping Tom or not - if he can get my temperature to rise and is hot - well why not. Okay so not true for me, but still I'll live vicariously through your characters.

Haha okay I know I just told you I don't like Peeping Tom, but I JUST changed my mind with the whole planting the kiss on her. That took guts! Poor guy going up a woman like her! lol She kicks ** though, I am thinking bout implementing my own three step process for shaun. We'll see what I come up with haha

And my wish as come true. I don't know what to say other than how awesome was this chapter!? I like what she did to take control and I like what he did in the end. But then u ended it here. BLah, i'm just too impatient! Anyway can't wait to read more!

No I don't want him to show up at all he's going to ruin everything
I just wanted to know so I can b prepare. update soon

Hahaha oh man I love the gangsta talk. next time we online, ima whipping it out ;)

I'm a lousy guesser. :P

This guy sounds like a creeper! Hahaha. :D
I'm assuming that they're gonna hook up somewhere in the story though ;) :P :D

Lol, I like her friend. She reminds me of one of my friends which kinda creepy reading about her, lol. Ooh, is that the blue eyed man? I hope so! Hurry up with the next one man!

I like it! A lot of emotion and I'm curious whats ahead for her!

This story is so good :D

I can't wait to see what happens next! :D

It's good to find you after all of these years! I didn't know you were still on here. This place has changed so much... Okay, I'll stop rambling now...

Awesome story so far! I think you're doing well with first person. There's a good balance of action and her thoughts in the chapters. I also like that she's sarcastic to the point where we readers know that she can take care of herself, but not so much that it takes away from the story.

Be careful about breaking the fourth wall. I noticed in this chapter your main character addressed the reader. It can weaken your narrative.

"Guilty about what, you ask?"

"You may think that I had this disgusting childhood with a father who abused me and a boyfriend who took me before my time."

It jolted me out of the story. Those are the only two places that I noticed it the most. I hope you find this to be useful.

aww..how sad...
is she going to meet her college guy again..but
what about peeping tom...
update soon...

Awe :( I want a tattooed boy haha...

You're doing good for only ever writing in 3rd POV, you have the 1st down pat. It's easy to sink into once you start writig it.

I am curious what Peeping Tom is gonna do. Wouldn't it be funny if he turned out to be tattoo guy!?

Hahaha oh man, I didn't realize how great this was gonna be until I read it. I knew the title, the general idea, but this is awesome. And I'm glad you're turning it into a story instead of a one shot haha...

BTW: I love her, she's awesome...