 Kristin Teabag 2009-11-01 . chapter 1Well congratulations on starting your squeal and finishing "Far Away"! You had some good characterization in this chapter. It made me immediately ask questions in my head. The conversation between Micheal and his dad seemed very realistic, and it also gives us some back story on Micheal relationship with his father. The only problem I have with this chapter, is that I feel as though you could have spent more time creating an atmosphere. |