|Reviews for Sin's Wages|
| Purplemonkey123 7/26/12 . chapter 1
Haha I loved the last 6 lines. The poem had nice rhythm and it rhymed and i saw no mistakes. Good job!
| killMeN0w 6/18/12 . chapter 1
Simple an incident wrapped up into beautiful words. Love the sentence formation. I could almost feel the regret, there, somewhere from the VERY second line...
The irony at the ended added to the beauty.
I'm reading your poems, right from the ones you'd posted LONG ago...I never got around to to so, as you know the reasons. And I'm REALLY enjoying them!
| J112011 12/24/11 . chapter 1
Very good piece of advice (I'm talking about the note that goes with this poem). Maybe this should be required reading in high school or college, although I bet most kids would overlook its message anyway.
Nice imagery, and full of desire, although I know I'll be wondering now in what way thighs can be seductively enticing. (That's not a question requiring an answer, by the way, just internal musings of a person who writes whatever comes to her mind)
But seriously, very funny.
| wo bu ai ni le 12/18/09 . chapter 1
Hahaha, I love it. Nothing else to say :D I just love it. I feel kind of sorry for the speaker.
| letyoursoultakeflight 9/23/09 . chapter 1
Love it! You write it so well ad the ending is excellent! It flows well!
| SirScott 8/22/09 . chapter 1
Good one. Women change after you marry them or so I'm told. Keep up the work.
| natmarie 8/20/09 . chapter 1
Way to not tell me you have new stuff up. I like this. It flows well and the rhymes don't seem too over done. The zing of humor is great too. :)
| Isca 8/19/09 . chapter 1
"I coveted my neighbor’s wife." 'Covet' is one of my favourite words, so naturally, I was drawn into the poem right away.
"Then I married my neighbor’s ex-wife, and regretted it for the rest of my life." This ending is very powerful. Even though the speaker's new wife used to 'give herself freely' to him, he still carries that guilt with him.
| LostInMe 8/19/09 . chapter 1
Good one...the rhymes are wonderful, and the ending is perfect in its irony, warning readers that even when the sin is done, the guilt can stay forever.
| Doxie Doll 8/17/09 . chapter 1
I think it would be interesting if you continued this. Maybe explain why the speaker regrets marrying the woman.
I also like how you rhymed 'thighs' and 'rise'
| Mirabella 8/17/09 . chapter 1
He he, i liked the ending, made me smile. :)
And the rhyming was well done, the flow of the peice too.