Starting out to read, I noticed instantly that the first paragraph was unnessacary. The first line is nice, but the rest is just annoying and could have been put in later in a more intresting way.

The setting was refreshing, honestly. It's been a very long time since I've read western. The way you started each part, also, was neat. Like: "It was a hot and humid day in Little Town." That was just cute. It's unique way to do things, well, at least for modern times...to write in a classical tone. (I know that might not make any sense, but I hope you get what I'm talking about...) The rest of the openers and closings were also nice, they drew a guy into the story and invited to read on. If only the beggining was like that.

Dialogue was well-done, except for sometimes I got lost because you didn't put enough tags. Even in a one on one conversation, adding tags sparingly helps keep readers on top of things.

I personally found your characters exciting and unique in their own ways, depsite the fact you said some weren't yours. I enjoyed watching them do diffrent things because I related to their types so much. Not that I'm like them, but that I've seen those classical types of chars before and I love them, they're just...down to earth?

A suggestion for taking your time. Even though this is western, you don't have to jump around. Take your time. Slow down to describe things, describe emotions or situations. As long as you don't go overboard, description is refreshing. Some of the time you did an excellent job of this and I could really see what was going on, and other times I was lost because you just gave a one-sentence description of the acton.

Good job! Favorites.
-Katie
(By the way I have given up checking for grammar/spelling. It's ridiculous to do that until the final draft.)

Your opening paragraph was too long for an opening. You gotta get the reader's attention in as few words as possible with the intro. Avoid opening stories with too much text.

Since this is a western setting, I understand that your characters' dialogue should reflect the settings. However, I think you went a little overboard with it. Sometimes I can't make out what they're trying to say.

The pace in this is actually a bit too fast. I have no idea what's going on, no idea what the plot is so far. It's just too much information at once.

All in all, I didn't really enjoy this. It's not that you're not a good writer; you're excellent. But this genre is very hard for me to get into. Western was never my thing.

Keep writing; good luck for your future pieces.