   Isca 2009-08-20 . chapter 11I like this haiku too. I often have reoccuring dreams or reoccuring daydreams, and sometimes (over time), the line between 'fantasy' and 'reality' becomes a little blurred.
I enjoyed reading this haiku collection. Keep up the good work. :) |
| Isca 2009-08-20 . chapter 10 OH. MY. GOD.
I love this haiku.
I know that's probably not the correct thing to say, since it deals with abuse, but it's powerful, striking, and wonderfully creepy.
:) |
| Isca 2009-08-20 . chapter 9 This is my favourite haiku so far. I love both the title and the haiku itself. I love the idea that the love burning in someone's eyes can burn you alive - that's incredible. :D |
| Isca 2009-08-20 . chapter 8 "Shameful waste." This is a very powerful line - it's so raw and cruel. |
| Isca 2009-08-20 . chapter 7 "I find glue more use." This line would sound better if the word 'use' was changed to 'useful,' but then the syllable count would be off, so I don't know what to suggest. I like the general meaning here, though: it's better to fix things rather than kill them. |
| Isca 2009-08-20 . chapter 6 "Simply abandoned." I like the contrast between these two words - abandoning someone is most definitely not 'simple,' but I like that the speaker suggests that it is easy to do so. |
| Isca 2009-08-20 . chapter 5 Both the first and third lines are 6 syllables long instead of 5.
"We're both going to jump." I like this twist on the idea of 'falling' in love - it's very creative. :) |
| Isca 2009-08-20 . chapter 4 "Perfect porcelain." Nice 'p' alliteration.
"She's the reflection of my soul." This line is both stunning and haunting. Wow. :D |
| Isca 2009-08-20 . chapter 3 This haiku is very interesting. I can sense that there's definitely a story behind this one. I like the emphasis on the word 'do' because it compliments the tone of the haiku well. |
| Isca 2009-08-20 . chapter 2 "They served their purpose." Wow. This is a powerful line. I like that the speaker believes that cutting helped her to attract people's attention to the fact that she's "so misunderstood." |
| Isca 2009-08-20 . chapter 1 "It's not as if she is loved." I love the tone of this line. It's so emotionally devastating that it practically knocks the reader off of their chair.
"She's catatonic." I like this ending - it's very vivid and powerful. |
 Peachesandcream15 2009-08-18 . chapter 11Lovely, all of them. Beautifully put, love the sarcasm ;)
Love Alex x |
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