I agree with others. :) Unforced rhyme and it is a nice comment on class and just workforce in general. It makes me think, which is always a good thing.

PS. Thanks for the poetry reviews.

Aha. I like the contrast between the regality of the title and the vulgarity of the poem's subject.

"Writhing on a steel pole." Oh my. This line is so powerful and vivid. Your use of the word 'writhing' here is brilliant.

"Your earning years are brief." Good point.

"Writhing"...nice. As always, your rhymes are creative and fun. And I agree with you about the title - it definitely has some spark!

Danseuse sans Vetements does have WAY more class then stripper. I'm going to start using it.

I liked the rhymes they didn't feel forced
Very nice moral.
If you're a Danseuse sans Vetements, save up your tips and/or get an education!

-Jessica

If a woman stays in shape she might be able to work until she's 50. Good poem, it flows well and entertains.


~SirScott

Maybe it will catch on. It's a good poem, otherwise.

I like the seeming classiness of the title in French, which then takes us through the story of fun and youth, to seedy places, and cold peniless old age, where the golden gilding the poem began in is gone. A sad retorical end. Well done. :)