 jaybey 2009-08-30 . chapter 1Like it, definitely. Though I'm not sure I'd want to spread peanut butter on it...not exactly my spread of choice. It's a good take on the whole high school reinvention premise. I really like that he's sort of calculating, yet quite laid back at the same time, I guess that sort of comes with never having to deal with consequences for very long. But it's good, it gives him his own personality, sets him a bit apart, in my mind at least, from the rest.
One thing though, you should probably take another look at the beginning part there, the transition from the introduction to him waking up wasn't really as smooth as it could have been. |