wow. wonderful expression of a dominating will to be submissive. I like the symbolism of the bird greatly, and the line "Wet feathers and bloody claws are flaws only I could love." stuck with resonance to my core. great work. the last line rang true as always. love this piece. favorited.

Usually I try to give a critique of a poem in a review. But I honestly can't think of anything you could have possibly done better.

Utterly beautiful.

"You starve yourself in heart and stomach both." Your use of the word 'starve' here is very creative and refreshing. I love that one can 'starve' oneself of food and love.

"Those I could love in you." Aww, that's so beautiful! I like that the speaker loves the 'flaws' of this other person.

The 'tether' and 'indulge' parts reminded me of the myth regarding Prometheus. :)

Ah sweet romance, you use amazing detail, I really like the starting sentence with the ripped wing bit. You are a amazing poet, no spelling mistakes and you have the pace downpat. It kept me reading. Th format was also very well done, while not in a "traditional" format it was beautiful. I'm not crazy about romance, but this is a great poem. I couldn't see any flaws.


In all a 9.5 out of 10.

Your word choices were so good! I liked "love" in the first line a lot. I thought it set the tone well. And "tethers", "indulge", "conquest", and "scale" were all very powerful and vivid; not stale or uninteresting. ;)

Descriptions. I had a clear picture in my head while I read this. The descriptions in this were well done.

"Wet feathers and bloody claws are flaws only I could love." Wonderful internal rhyme! 'claws/flaws' added a more poetic feeling to the piece. Nicely done!

(And the exclamation points were a good touch, by the way.)

Very nice. Strong and moving, with a very nice ending.
Simple, and surprising, in the good way.
I like it. It paints the picture of desperation and longing nicely.

WOAH. i think i actually got the chills while reading this. your imagery is incredible and the subject matter is heart-wrenching. this really made me think about whether or not i do things that make other people feel this was about me...

my favorite lines were:
"Wet feathers and bloody claws are flaws only I could love."
and
"Just take refuge, use me, / Scale these walls, oh lover of stone,"

really, really amazing piece. i hope you write more. :)

peace,
red.

I like your poem incredible words you use
the beginning is beautiful what has ripped your wing, love
I'm not much of a romantic but i know a good poem when i see one very nice keep it up

Great job! I love the refrences and imagrey you presented here, they really bring it to life. I could really see this as though an actual woman were begging a man to love her in return.
I find no major flaws, and not many minor ones either. I have to search to find them! *gasp!*

very powerful and moving in such a symbolic way, this was excellent. Great job! :)

I think you should have put this under love poems. While it contains no compliments. It's beautiful and full of love because it's full of your hope for him/her.

I really liked the desperation that the speaker uses to try to persuade the person to love them. There was loads of feelingin this poem, and I loved it.
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