This deserves a sequel. I really liked your writing in this story. Great job!

Nice one-shot.
I really liked Chelsea's obsessed watch over Josh in the beginning. C:
Your writing style is also very easy to read, so, yes, well done.

Read 'Fling' if you have the chance.
- Signed as J.

Yeah, another one-shot! Although this one seems like a sequel is required to see if they make it! Thanks for posting!

Is this story close to your experience?

You write very well. Some of the ideas of the girls seem immature, yet realistic but I expect the narrator to know better. I'd like to see more of the immature narrator if that is possible.

If this story was not close to your experience, then this is pretty good. If this is similar to your own experience, I'd like to see something original that you're creating because your writing and narration seems to have enormous potential.