you are going to be such a different kind of mother than my own, that beyond this fact i cannot predict

anything.

this whole thing has my completely amazed. i read each word of it and i absolutely LOVE all the emotions you mix together, its so beautiful.

"I wanted you to feel the rain." Holy God. What an AMAZING line! :D

"It took him until december to even utter a single word to me." Aww! That's adorable. The 'shy and mysterious' types are lovely.

"'You,' was all he managed." Honestly, this part is brilliant. I love the idea that Adrian doesn't even have the courage to say anymore than that one word--he's so enraptured.

this is... wow
really good.

beautiful descriptions and such a wonderful idea. i love it, i really do.

i would love opinions from a talented writer like yourself on my work; it would mean a lot!

Wow
That's really good

very interesting. nicely written.

I liked the level of connection that was going on in this chapter. I could feel the solid connection (not just physical, but emotional) between the mother and the child. The baby was up, so the mother was up, and even the painting room seemed to put both of them at ease. This is a really interesting story that you’re compiling here, I’d be interested to see what happens next.

Much love,
Juliet.

Jules, via the Review Marathon (links in my profile)

I both equally liked and disliked the paralleling harshness vs. tenderness in this prose. On the one hand I liked the rebellious teenager opening, yet on the other I feel that when she’s pregnant thinking about destroying her growing child (even though she wont) is just so harsh. Although having said that I liked how multifaceted this story is. You compile a complete 360 character in very few words, so nice work with that. I guess it’s always just shocking to read about the darker depths of motherhood.

Much love,
Juliet.

Jules, via the Review Marathon (links in my profile)

my, my, my - you continue to astonish me.
the only error i could find was this:
" i can sympathize with you, little on--i long for you..."
you forgot the 'e' in the word 'one' 8D
but it's nonetheless FLAWLESS, my dear.

i've always wished that i could give you constructive criticism. but how can you do such a thing to a piece of writing so...flawless? something written so eloquently?
i know i say this a lot.
but babe, i envy you so much. i could only wish to write like you.

Okay, sorry about that review
Apparently when I read it I wasn't paying much attention
I didn't know it was the second to that one about pregnancy
XD
I'm smart

But I like it
You should talk to some people about what it's like to be pregnant
Maybe it'll give you inspiration

It's pretty good
You should talk to Mrs. Lone about what it's like to be pregnant lol

Obscenely short isn't a bad thing. :)

Another lovely chapter. You paint a beautifully haunting picture here, and it makes me want to read more. I'll be watching!

Aw. Little old me inspired you? :) I'm touched.

And this is a wonderful story. And I'm very glad that someone else likes the lack of capitalization thing. :)