I am now officially in love with Atroceruleous with that first sentence. That is so cute.

Leonie seems to be taking the whole thing well though, since she smiles and talks back to him. But, this is fantasy/adventure so it doesn't have to be completely realistic =]

Astroceruleous's explanation of what speculum are was very interesting. They remind me of the daemons from the Golden Compass.

Atro's and Leonie's exchanges in the forest were great. That made me love Atro even more. He's very likeable =] Also, the banana bit was great too! ^_^

Oh no! You ended with another cliffhanger! I want to know what happens next! XD

...I wish I had a floating fish creature to be my speculum.

I was hoping we'd get a description of Leonie in this chapter, since I'm not entirely sure how to picture her in my mind so far. You do say she has auburn hair but more description would be nice, especially since you give us such a nice description of Atroceruleous. =3

Also, Atrocerulous is a cool name, not to mention Atrocerulous himself. XD I love how he spoke in her head in a baritone voice. Baritone voices = awesome.

I don't think this chapter sounds too self pitying. I mean, after all, Leonie was just in a plane crash where presumably everyone, including her sweet Auntie Fayne, died! She has a right to be sad and self pitying!

"It seemed that the insanity come much earlier than I expected." This line is great and made me laugh.

Hey there! It's Chiblingbaby paying you back for the lovely picture you drew for me! =]

Right off the bat, I love how you introduce your own mythology with the Speculum. It's a very interesting and unique concept so props to you for that! The last paragraph of the prologue is great. I love how the narrator says that the plane had crashed so matter of factly. With that sentence, you pull the reader into your story.

The sequence with them in the airplane was very intense, especially toward the end. Aunt Fayne seems really sweet and when she got up to help the child and ended up falling over I was like "Ah, no, Auntie Fayne!" along with Leonie. XD

I like your writing style. It flows naturally for the most part and it's easy to read. You also choose good descriptive words within your sentences.

Gasp! And you ended the chapter with a cliff hanger! What happened? I must read on...

Sorry it took me so long for the review! And thanks for the mention!

I really like everything you added to the original and I really enjoyed this chapter even though it was basically character development and plot furthering. But I always like being introduced to characters! So whoppee for that!

Hope you can update soon because the next chappie looks interesting!

HA!
That's funny ^^
I wonder what's with the eyes nyeh?
Anyways, this looks good, I wonder what will happen next?
ImmortalIncarnate

I was pulled in by the synopsis and honestly expected something similar to the Golden Compass but this story is brilliant. A few mistakes here and there but we all make them.

I found the character brilliant, you observed everything well and so far it's an enjoyable read. I shall happily wait for more.

Can I fall out of my chair now? No, because I'd destroy my computer... This is highly amusing, especially since it was inspired by a dream. I get my ideas from the music I listen to, xD
I look forward to the next chapter of this, and I can't wait to see how it turns out. Mostly because I'm mad at my computer for having so much crap on it. (that's my fault)

^_^ Anyway, good job on it, I can't wait to be introduced to Artoceruleous. Where'd you get the name anyway? Very long, hard to pronounce and latin-ish

That was perfect... You have just the right balance between self-pity and determination in the narrator. And her reaction to being alone on the island is also just right. No major problems or anything, except that i don't know how she would find her way back to the exact same spot she washed up on. I feel like she would probably get really lost and lay down where she was. I was really interested to read about the looks of the Speculum, which wasn't exactly the way I imagined but really cool. I'm excited to read what happens next!

-Frost

You might have found this chapter hard to write and maybe you don't like it that much but...I DO! This is so cool and original (I know I sound like a broken record machine). Please update soon and I'm really looking forward to seeing those pics! Oh, and do you have a beta for this fic?

Wow, very interesting! I'm really excited to see where this goes! The idea is great and it reminds me a tiny bit of the Golden Compass books (props, b/c they're my favorites). Ok, so because that was great, I'm now going to be really, really picky to find stuff that could be fixed. My comments and suggestions:

You have a well written prologue, which is difficult so great job!

"As much as I protested the trip, flying really was one of my worst fears,..."
Maybe change the comas to dashes: "As much as I protested the trip – flying really was one of my worst fears –..."

"'I knew that this weather wasn't good for your health...'"
Interesting info, but I think the godmother should be more concerned with the plane bucking around and Leonie's fear of flying than the weather.

"their agitated murmurs reaching my ears."
…um if the plane was bouncing around as much as you make it sound (great job with this, btw), people would be shouting, screaming, and crying (especially if they were getting hit with luggage). Also I don’t know how well Leonie and her godmother would be able to carry on a conversation. Their voices would be all shaky at the very least.

"My musings were jolted from my thoughts..."
Maybe just "My musings were disrupted..." or something like that.

"this time even harder, as some passengers were even thrown out of their seats."
Perhaps use "this time even harder, and some passengers were thrown out of their seats" so that you don't repeat even twice. Also, you use "as" a lot but I really think "and" works better here.

"She blatantly ignored me and began speaking quietly to the girl, who stared up at her with wide green eyes."
I feel like she should be hurridly picking the girl back up and passing her to her mother, not just talking to her. There should be a lot more urgency going on within the plane. Outside the plane, its great. Also, you already mention that Faye’s eyes are green.

"'Not again,'" I groaned out loud, and moved to take my seat belt off when the cabin jerked again, though that time it seemed as if something large had bumped into the airliner. My eyes widened in panic when I saw my aunt scream and tumble down the lane. 'Auntie Faye!!'
Not sure how this would work… or why its such a bad thing that Faye’s helping this girl. So maybe in stead of screaming and tumbling down the lane (?), Faye could just get up to get back to her seat and fall as the plane buckles. Also, and I'm being really picky here ; P, I don't think you should say that her eyes widened, just because its a first person narrator (when was the last time you thought about your own eyes widening?) and it kind of slows down all of the excitement you've built up so well.

"My god, this was supposed to be my vacation. What exactly was happening?"
Lol

"Auntie Faye!" I cried out again, and all but ripped the belt off my waist. I ran as fast as I could through the mess of people, looking for any signs of my guardian.
Why/how is she running through a mess of people? If the plane is going down, they are all going to stay in their seats, and probably holding on for dear life too. Also, not sure how well she could run what with the plane jolting as badly as it is. And really, where could Faye have gone? Its not like she got thrown all the way down the aisle right (cuz that’s not possible, especially if Leonie’s able to run around in the plane a minute later). So maybe have Leonie help her aunt back into her seat after falling or something like that.

"...the chaos that was beginning to cultivate."
Um, I feel like it’d already be pretty chaotic!

"The head-splitting crash that followed the collision of the plane into the ocean."
Okay, so unless they were really low, I feel like they would have probably all died on impact… especially Leonie, who was out of her seat remember. However, you could maybe mention how they were flying low or how the plane didn't fall super, super fast (like maybe if the engines broke, not the wings). That would make them surviving the actual crash more believable.

Highly dramatic ending... I love the cliffhanger!

Well, I know this was a super long and very nit-picky review (which you can ignore all of if you don't like, I don't mind). Honestly though, this story is worth it. I'm sure its going to be amazing! Okay, so please write more soon.

-Frost

Oh interesting. PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE update this or Candy King soon okay? Your stories are so original!

Well,as far as I can see there aren't any mistakes.Good job for the first chapter.Update soon!