damn this is good

"but i would take imagination
over reality any day.)"
nice line.

Love the idea in the last stanza! And the imagery in the first is genius. :)

i loved the line "the sky is peeling off/ in sheets of scattered blue"

nice job.

yours until the wind changes,
gg

Love the imagery in the first stanza. The ending parenthesis are so breath taking. & I feel I understand because I feel the same way. Beautifully written. :)

"Love cannot save us anymore." That's a very sad thought. It appears as though the love that these people share isn't strong enough anymore to withstand certain obstacles. It makes me wonder: was their love really 'true,' to begin with? This line is obviously very thought-provoking. :)

WELCOME BACK! I've been eagerly anticipating new work of yours!
This is beautiful. The first two lines have a wonderful tone and I love the image of the sky "peeling," that's a great great image.

This is really moving.

One part confused me. The part about blinking back happiness. The tone here seemed sad.

I did like the piece though. The beginning is an a great opening really drew me in. I also thought your descriptions in the third and fourth line were really powerful. Great ending also.

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I loved "the sky is peeling off
in sheets of scattered blue"

Wow... short but beautiful and so much meaning.

I really like the ending, nice piece.

I loved the lines: ‘the sky is peeling off/in sheets of scattered blue’ with special emphasis on the words ‘peeling’ and ‘scattered’ it makes me think of the sky as a huge cubist painting. It was very inspiring.

I could tell that the rest of the poem was very personal to you, which is great for the reader to emotionally connect to the writer. I see you haven't posted anything in a while, welcome back, and keep up the good work.

Much love,
Juliet.